You tie your points well to representation Joe, and you structure your essay well. - Some of your points are a bit far-fetched and convoluted - Londoners aren't used to confronting dogs? Really? - Some of your points focus on WHAT is happening, not how it is CONSTRUCTED. The narrative is not what you need to focus on. - Timing is an issue; you need more on sound, editing and Mise en Scene. - Your analysis is not in depth enough; develop it and explore representation in more sophisticated detail. Grade: C
You tie your points well to representation Joe, and you structure your essay well.
ReplyDelete- Some of your points are a bit far-fetched and convoluted - Londoners aren't used to confronting dogs? Really?
- Some of your points focus on WHAT is happening, not how it is CONSTRUCTED. The narrative is not what you need to focus on.
- Timing is an issue; you need more on sound, editing and Mise en Scene.
- Your analysis is not in depth enough; develop it and explore representation in more sophisticated detail.
Grade: C